The Official Writing Challenge
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Prisoners, regardless of what they have done, need to know that someone on the outside cares enough to encourage them to seek the Lord. Good message of hope!
09/06/05
Interesting attempt. Watch the time shifts (today, mixed with past tense), also some jailease would help. Keep writing, this has potential.
Well done. Earlier this year I heard of an ex-prisoner who had also been abandoned and had found God - her name was also Jackie! Thanks for sharing.
09/07/05
If you left off the background information, you could spend more words in helping your reader to know the inner Jackie better (show, not tell). A very good piece of writing!
09/07/05
Very nice!