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01/22/09
I liked your story, although I was ready to give Guy a thrashing, and she just rolled with the punches.
01/22/09
I agree. Guy's a jerk who deserves to have to sit through an opera. Good on ya, Carol!
01/22/09
Oh, I definitely wanted to throttle that guy--she had much, much more patience than I would have. Great job of drawing us in to the story.
What a clever woman. I think she planned that from the start just so she could get her own way.
01/24/09
The story really draws you in regardless if you agree with the way the husband behaved or not. I don't think I would have titled it "Cuff Links" especially since you spelled it differently a couple of times in your piece. Once you referred to them as 'it' being a pair it should have been 'them'. Nitpicking I know but helpful I hope. Brush up a couple areas and this will a good entry.
I liked the Cuff links title myself- it drew me in because it was different.Yes we could all throttle him, but you made him believable; The ending was fun too- if a bit deceptive.
01/25/09
I thought the man was very condescending. Carol deserves better!
01/27/09
Fun read!

I like Carol as a character. :) And yep. We're all mad at Guy! :)

I don't know if it's my Canadian sensibilities or what, but the toilet flushing and Carol coming out of the bathroom is, in my opinion, just "too much information." : /

Oh. I like the title, too. :)

Good job with details. I especially liked it when she sprayed him with cologne. Did that have a double meaning?!
Great article, and so much human interaction - believable. I thought the husband was just a bit overly 'me oriented.'

But I was so glad Carol found the cuff links.
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