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12/13/08
Ahhh, this touched my heart because it brought back memories of my and my son's first Christmas without my husband. It was so lonely and difficult to find hope and love still amidst the grief. I really love how the children came around at the end of your story to support their mom.
12/15/08
Moving story of what too many families go through, and effective contrast between the initial self-centered reactions of some children, to coming around to being aware of what their mother was going through. May I also suggest that you add an extra return carriage between each paragraph, it breaks up the text and makes it easier to read.
Nice job with the topic. Good characterizations of this family - very realistic. :)