The Official Writing Challenge
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11/20/08
Really good story and you left us wondering if it was God til the end but I had my hunch.

My suggestion would be to make some different paragraphs. It is hard on the eye with so much all together. Content great, presentation not so great...kinda like the gift wrapping :) Great Letter to the Father.
Understood and enjoyed the last part of this. Confused about many references in the first part - "favorite color", "favorite material", "under the tape", "3rd layer". Perhaps utilizing more of the alloted word count would have helped clarify some of these points. :)