The Official Writing Challenge
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11/10/08
I like how the grandpa and grandson finally connected at the end. Good job.
I like how the grandpa got through to Dylan what he felt the Christmas lights stand for. Also, I enjoyed reading President Eisenhower's speech. Well written. Nicely done!
11/11/08
Nice job. I do think the speech took too much out of your own story (due to the word limit) which could use some more interaction, especially in the end. I like your style of writing.
Marlene, you did a great job writing from a grandfather's POV. It's never easy when you try writing from a male perspective (lol, if you're a female anyway).

I'm with Dylan when it comes to a hot fudge sundae.

I like how you included what President Eisenhower said, a touch of history is always interesting.

I can't wait till Christmas to be able to drive around the neighborhood looking at lights.

Congratulations on coming 9th in Level 2 my friend.