The Official Writing Challenge
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08/30/08
A glimpse into this family's private morning...I'm glad no one can peek in like this at me!

You switched POV a few times, and I was waiting for something to make Philip a sympathetic character.

Glad that the wife found just the lesson that she needed!
08/31/08
this story has great potential w/ a bit of tighter writing...

and probably more people out there can relate than would like to admit!!
09/02/08
This is a lesson I need to remember. A very good lesson indeed.