The Official Writing Challenge
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Great use of details--the mud squishing and such. It sounded like a kid was telling the tale. Well done.
I would have liked more about the little girl to help identify with you aiding her in overcoming her fear. Your writing did hold my attention.
I enjoyed this piece; and I too, would have loved a little more about the girl. Even so, it sounded like a fun time among friends.
Nice story. Enjoyed the different slant the father and the child placed on their prayers for the same situations. :)
Nice story - I completely enjoyed this one!