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What a lovely, yet sad depiction of a father's final moments. I would have possibly briefly explained his relationship with Jesus that led up to his "being in the fields of heaven." But that's just me.
Nicely done.
Blessings, Lynda
Beautiful, touching story. Loved it.
So sweet. Loved the picture of dying one seeing with heavenly vision.
A beautiful bittersweet story.
Such a precious story. God is good!
I liked the way that you plunked us right into the action. It's a very effective technique. Would have liked for it to have a stronger message but it is all about going home.
I got lost in the first sentence without the quotation marks... didn't know who was speaking. The rest of the story was very nice... I'd like to think that even though we're sad when someone dies, if we know they're going to heaven, that we wouldn't be as sad as what this woman was. Love the line where she told him to come for her someday. Thanks for sharing.
I liked your title and the description of seeing his parents before he dies. Nice Job!