The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked how you related the church and its members to being a home and a family.

I think splitting this up into more paragraphs would help the reader be able to follow it better. That's a very minor thing though.

Thank you for sharing this. Keep on writing. :)
06/09/08
Loved this delightful sketch of a child's viewpoint. "coming hear" should be "coming here." Even the brevity of this article accentuates the childlike quality. Beautiful.