The Official Writing Challenge
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Beautiful. This brought tears to my eyes, and it's such an important subject, since, in many ways, we are a fatherless generation. And interesting how you said you were thankful. That's what my devotions were about today; being thankful for various trials.
Awesome! You hit a home run here--this is beautifully written from the rejected, broken heart of a daughter--now a daughter of the King.
This reads almost like a fable or a parable--very interesting approach.

some of your paragraphs are in past tense and some in present tense. Fixing that inconsistency would improve it a bit.

Good title, great ending.
You portrayed the father and the daughter well. You demonstrated clearly how important a father's love is.
This was a too familiar read, I have read this or similiar pieces before. Writing was good though.