The Official Writing Challenge
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Found the first five paragraphs of your story very hard going. For the rest, it is logical and easily readable. Keep writing. God bless you.
04/12/08
I understand the dread you felt at the beginning--but I'm so glad you were able to move on and replace that with much better memories of your grandmother.
I liked the vivid descriptions of the first few paragraphs; I felt the lesson for me was that greater understanding can bring about the loving relationship we desire.
I liked how you started off very down and out and then changed the feelings to happiness at the end.

I often felt this way about my paternal grandfather. There were times that I just didn't want to go visit him, because of the way that he was. However, I quickly realized that getting to visit with him was a blessing from God, and I cherish those visits now.

Thank you for sharing.
04/18/08
Congratulatins, Patrick, on placing 11th in your level with this piece. Great work!