The Official Writing Challenge
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This is absolutely lovely. This is kind of how I picture it, as sort of a transition from this life into our eternal life. Very well done!
Nice poem. I don't know how to critiqe poems, all I know is I enjoyed yours.
Although some measure shifts this is a great poem worthy of note, it works in narrative form carrying a complete message. Nicely presented.
Well done as usual Peggy! I liked the way the poem started out giving the reader the impression that this was about a baby being born but then takes a twist and ends in a new spirit being birthed into heaven at the moment of death. Bravo! Love ya! Joyce
Oh, what a birthday celebration that will be! Your words cling to the reader's heart and offer a feeling of comfortable familiarity! Few are able to do this as well as you! Lovely poem, indeed!!
That will be the Heavenly moment we are all waiting for, as children of the Most High God. You presented this very well which brings us in awesome anticipation and joy of a life far beyond one can ever imagine. Sis. Peggy, I am blessed by the message of your poem. Great job! Love-Gloria
Well done Peggy, you caught the celebratory mood well.