The Official Writing Challenge
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Very nice original piece!

I pictured the story. I imagined it as a children’s book. Being that the characters were not human the lesson could be tame enough.
Excellent work! Keep shining for our Lord! Your writing is a blessing to me. Well put- we should always be thankful for His blessings and not be greedy for more!
01/17/08
I could picture this as a children's book - complete with adorable illustrations. A great lesson with wonderful rhyme and meter. Fun.
Great poem! Enjoyed it.
01/20/08
This mama read your wonderful rhyme and said it to her children. THEY absolutely loved it, and it spurred a great conversation. Thank you!
01/22/08
Ok, no words! This is just excellent! Good job!
Clever teaching lesson nicely cloaked in verse. Such things can take us by suprise...learning something when we hadn't intended to.
01/22/08
LOVE IT! A message to be taken to heart. Delivered in a masterful way!
01/22/08
This is WAY cute and a good message delivered in a creative poem. Great job.
01/22/08
Perfect! Rhyme, meter, imagery, and a message wonderful illustrated.
Wonderful and fun, I agree with the book comments.
01/23/08
Awwww.... awesome! This one could be an illustrated children's book!