The Official Writing Challenge
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01/11/08
Lovely story. I like how the Grandmother's influence came to fruition in the MC's answer to her prayer: the job. The title is quite apt.
01/11/08
I really liked the first 3/4th of this a great deal--I found myself really rooting for her to find the right place.

The ending seemed more like a summary of "the rest of the story".

I'd recommend, if you do anything more with this, to re-work the first paragraph so that it doesn't start with the cliche. It's as likely to turn off readers as it did your protagonist.

This was a very pleasant read--thanks for entering it!
I like the lessons the MC learned and that she applied them in her life. Wonderful advise from Grandmother.
01/18/08
Congratulations, Joy, on placing 14th in level 2 with this entry. Great job!