The Official Writing Challenge
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Very nice presentation of this idea. Keep at it.
Jenna's behaviour is a good reminder that the "church" goes on all week long and that someone is always watching. Good job!
Nice story reminding us that even the 'good' need a Savior. It's interesting that the Bible doesn't talk about being 'good' or 'bad' -- it talks about being evil or righteous. God doesn't care about our goodness, He looks for a heart willing to submit and obey. You've got some work to do on your tenses and grammar, but all in all, this is a great story. I enjoyed it! Christmas blessings! :)
I like the fact that your protagonist didn't have a dramatic testimony, but she still recognized her need for a savior.

The time line was a little bit confusing to me, and there are a few other minor edits.

Sweet story.
Good message here..could do with a little rearranging or something to bring that message into better focus. Thanks for sharing Jena's story.