The Official Writing Challenge
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This is brilliant. I love the beginning and the end and the way it all tied together in the middle. The message was wonderful, and it was a very good example of how we miss fellowship when we don't have it. Great piece.
Like how you tied everything in together. Very nice...
Very nice, good job!
Yes! I was hoping she would accept the invitation and enjoy fellowship once again. I really enjoyed this story.
Oh, so well written! You have a knack for describing the character and her thoughts. I like this very much.
The softball bit was a clever device for getting Allison back into fellowship. Nice job.
This is very good. Great characterization, and I love the softball cheer weaved in. I caught a couple places with some grammar issues (very minor), but this is excellent.
Your piece could be describing so many people who have been hurt by life. We all need to be aware of who we can invite back into the fold.
Agree with several of the other comments, and want to reiterate that I also loved the structure you used with the softball cheer thread throughout your story. It was a nice touch to give the story continuity. Made me think of what fellowship is all about--cheering our friends on. Great job!
Congratulations on your 2nd place. This is a well written story with a nice message. Good job.
Congrats! I just had to read this, after I saw the title. And I loved it. Thanks for putting a smile on my face. :)