The Official Writing Challenge
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09/15/07
I liked it, good writing.
09/16/07
Wow, you could make a whole book out of this!

Be careful of misspellings: I caught "it's" instead of "its", and "seperated" instead of "separated."

I can't imagine anything much more surprising!

Wow, this sounds like the beginning of a book! I guessed at the first question that the two were related, but wasn't sure how. Great story!
09/18/07
I thought maybe the executive was the mother, but the twin, I never thought of. You surprised me, too!
09/18/07
Very creative! I love the ending, and, of course, the build-up to it. This is very well done. It DOES read like the first part of a book. Hope you finish it!
Great writing filled with suspense and intrigue. I see this as having full novel potential.
What a surprise. I expected it to be her mother for some reason. Good twist.