The Official Writing Challenge
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You have some great lines and phrases in this piece. I especially like the fourth paragraph. The final paragraph could use some quotation marks.
Your title captured my attention immediately. The emotional struggle of pulling away from the spousal abuse is very aptly described. It kept my attention throughout the story.
Great title! Courageous writing!
I also was completely into this story. You did a good job holding my interest. Good title, also.
Good writing - the story was easy to follow and carried me to the end.

I would like to have felt more intensity in Maggie's pain - since hers is fresh.
The title was definately an attention getter. I thought that maybe you were going to write about David dancing naked before the Lord, as bold as that was.

I admit the title made me curious enough to read the story.

It was great! You have a gift. keep at it. I can't even think of any advice to offer.