The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a great story with a great pov. I was a little confused as to who was speaking until the snake appeared. I thought it was an older brother. But the story all filled in at the end. I like the lesson learned here.
This is a wonderful story. Kept my attention, loved the sense of adventure throughout especially that perilous encounter. And the wrap at the end was perfect. Great job of writing.
06/03/07
Cute story, great lesson--and I loved the naptime at the end!
06/04/07
Excellent sense of adventure. You had me engrossed from beginning to end. I also thought the MC was an older sibling, but this was wonderfully told!
06/07/07
Darling story not withstanding, this is such a lesson in trusting God the way our babies trust us! Good descriptions took us right along on the walk. Very sweet and inspiring adventure. ~
06/07/07
Great story! I love the relationship you describe between the two characters. Really sweet.
Very nice. I was surprised it was the grandmother speaking. I jumped in my seat when they saw that snake. That was quite a surprise to me. Great writing. Very smooth.