The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a great story with a great pov. I was a little confused as to who was speaking until the snake appeared. I thought it was an older brother. But the story all filled in at the end. I like the lesson learned here.
This is a wonderful story. Kept my attention, loved the sense of adventure throughout especially that perilous encounter. And the wrap at the end was perfect. Great job of writing.
Cute story, great lesson--and I loved the naptime at the end!
Excellent sense of adventure. You had me engrossed from beginning to end. I also thought the MC was an older sibling, but this was wonderfully told!
Darling story not withstanding, this is such a lesson in trusting God the way our babies trust us! Good descriptions took us right along on the walk. Very sweet and inspiring adventure. ~
Great story! I love the relationship you describe between the two characters. Really sweet.
Very nice. I was surprised it was the grandmother speaking. I jumped in my seat when they saw that snake. That was quite a surprise to me. Great writing. Very smooth.