The Official Writing Challenge
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05/31/07
Whooppeee!indeed. We all love it when the monster dies. This is a great kiddie story, so well told that even a Grammie like me can enjoy it. Such a good job!
This is a good story, but I had a little trouble with today's language in yesterday's story. I don't think David's grandchildren would say "you bet!" and some other of the words used. But the story itself would be good if the grandfather had been current, telling an old Bible story to modern day grandchildren. This is easy to fix. The writing is very good.
06/03/07
The grandfather is a great storyteller--I like the relationship protrayed between him and the children.