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Wow - this was well done, loved the suspense, the build up and the MC's escape. Shades of Logan's Run....
The scary thing about this is that I can see it happening in our future.
It really drew me in, and I was so relieved when he ran away.
Well, I have goosebumps! So very well written, draws the reader along and builds. Loved the escape at the end, sort of like grace from God. Excellent story and writing.
The building of suspense in this story was great. Very creative, I enjoyed this one!
Very interesting and well-written.
Wow! You did great building the suspense and conveying the tension. What a sobering truth for us: we can be soooo easily lured from God's narrow path. Very well done. :-)