The Official Writing Challenge
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05/17/07
Would love to see what changes happened... (a couple minor typos "...like she was seated IN a buggy."), and possibly a nice start to something larger.
This sounds like the start of a much longer story. I wish I knew what happened. Did her visit change anything? Did it affect her life? How?
I could picture each scene nicely. I did notice the minor typo's Shari mentioned, but they did not detract from the story. Well done.
I like how you connected the cpnsequences of the past with the present in this story. Keep up the good work!
The writing here is very good. I'm sure we would all like to change the past to alter the future.
05/21/07
My dad's a genealogist, and he'd sure love to do this! fun to read, thanks a bunch!
05/21/07
My dad's a genealogist, and he'd sure love to do this! fun to read, thanks a bunch!
05/21/07
Intriguing concept nicely written! Would love to hear if anything changed - and where the next stop would be! Great job.
05/22/07
A fun read! Did her visit make a difference? It was neat that the sheriff and officer were both Hails. :-)
A dream or real life? I enjoyed this. I'm guessing the character/avatar is...Charles? Hmmm, very good writing, I like the descriptions and the dialouge between them. Nicely done.
A very clever time-travel story. I like how you linked it together. (I thought it would have been an additional connecting touch if they both had auburn hair and blue eyes.)
05/23/07
CLEVER...CREATIVE and OH! so well written!
An entertaining read. I like to dabble in genealogy, so this was fun for me.
Nicely done.
This was intriguing to read. It was like a fun sci-fi TV show series episode. Very creative idea. Well written, a good read!