The Official Writing Challenge
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This was beautifully written and brought tears to my eyes.
I have often wondered about this woman in the bible, and I feel as though this has given me a little glimpse of her life. Thankyou.
I think you did a wonderful job bringing this story to life. I could feel with the woman's pain, and then relief, through your words.
One thought for critique: in the first and second paragraphs you speak of "me" - but in the rest of the story you speak of "she". This was confusing to me - I was not sure who you meant by "me".
Keep up the good work!
Nice retelling of the story about the woman with the issue of blood. There is one on this topic in Beginners called "By Faith Made Whole." You have a very descriptiive style of writing and I especailly liked your final paragraph. Good job! :)
Lisa, I just wanted you to know that as one of the four judges this week in historical, I thought your entry was the best one in all levels, despite an easy to fix small POV problem. You truly captured the right emotion with wonderful descriptive writing.
Thanks for your kind words! The POV problem was actually a text transfer problem. The original Word version had those portions in italics, and once I'd submitted the piece I couldn't correct for that. Oh, well... God bless all!