The Official Writing Challenge
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04/21/07
Some very funny moments here. Try working on showing more than telling now. I loved this phrase: 'Her command rumbled out like a boulder and rolled me flat.'
A very sweet story. I loved some of your one-liners. Nice job.
04/22/07
I did show more then tell but because of the word restriction I had to restrict myself
04/25/07
Disasters are often more attitude in origin than event driven. I'm glad your attitude saw the blessings of God more than it did the events of the day. May God bless your marriage. It's a story worth re-telling when your children are old enough to appreciate it. Keep writing.