The Official Writing Challenge
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Very good use of descriptions and emotions. This was well told - keep it up!
I was especially touched by "I cried so she would stop." What a perfectly rendered statement, in six perfect syllables!

Lovely story, heartbreaking and tender.
nicely told
So real! It's hard to imagine such a scene, having never been in such a situation. Good writing.
Amazingly vivid description. I was RIGHT there. This is so, SO deserving of the editor's choice. Congratulations!
Congratulations on a fine piece of writing. I especially liked the way you honestly portrayed the thoughts of a child in the line...pretending they were growling bears...

Well done!
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved first place and your EC win! This is an excellently written, touching story that kept me absorbed all the way through! :)
Congratulations on your intermediate level and EC win! Your story is amazing! Your recognition is well-deserved.
This is very good writing. Excellent POV from the little child. You told a lot in just the few allowed words. It's written good and tight. Congratulations on your win! It is well-deserved! :)
Congratulations on your win! I really enjoyed reading this piece and felt like I was standing in line with your characters.
Congratulations Joe! I've always had a special place in my heart for the Russian people, so this especially spoke to me. As a judge this week, this was one of my favorites! Great win!
Congrats on your placement, Joe. Excellent job!!! God bless.
Sorry I've only just got around to reading this. It's really super - a very well-deserved win. Many congratulations, and I'll be watching out for more of your work!