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This is a good commentary on why it is important to stay in the Word of God. It is a disciplinary action on our parts; and by participating, it keeps us fit. You did a good job of writing. I would have found it a little easier to read if the quotes had been separated into their own paragraphs.
02/22/07
Great illustration of the importance of every aspect of our health -- both physical and spiritually.

I agree that the dialogue needs to be divided. Each new speaker should be a new pharagraph.

I really liked how the pastor/brother's advise for spiritual fitness program was the same as the physical fitness program. Clever.
Good pov. We're often surprised when our spiritual or natural lifestyle catches up with us.
A good concept on how we can ignore God the same as we ignore fitness. I would separate your dialogue. Look at a book that has a conversation between two people. That helps me. Keep writing.