The Official Writing Challenge
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01/18/07
the duble spacing is hard on the readers eye. i tried to read it but my head started hurting. im sure its good
01/19/07
I'm trying to see if "thrown" was done on purpose for symbolism or if you meant "throne." Overall it's a good piece but I'm distracted trying to figure this out.
01/19/07
I believe the word you meant to use is "throne." It is misused in the body of your text as well. There are some other gramatical errors, but the heart of your peice is very good. I'm not sure if this is poetry or a prayer...or both...but the thoughts are important and true. More attention to word usage and punctuation would greatly enhance this. You have some very good expressions here, but formatting often can make or break a writing piece. I struggle with it myself, at times.