The Official Writing Challenge
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12/14/06
I really liked the specific details in this story--the videos, peanut butter sandwiches, coloring, and so on.

Am wondering if it was written by an actual first grader. If so, it's amazingly well done. If not, I would imagine a first grader throwing in some comments or observations that might sound a little off-the-wall or cute to grownups. This would add humor to the piece and increase its realism.

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12/16/06
A very cute little story that had me wondering if it really was written by a first grader. Nice job!