The Official Writing Challenge
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11/30/06
I loved the way the dialogue between God the Father and Son here is brought to life here! Also really enjoyed the specific descriptions of people observed, such as the child pushed aside for the "important man," and the mob stepping over the crippled person. Beautiful, original way of conveying the Gospel message and making it real for the reader!
12/01/06
Ooh, my favorite volunteer! Great job with the topic. Good writing, too. You could have left out the "he continued"'s, and there are a few punction errors/typos, but did not distract from the message at all. Loved it!
12/02/06
Excellent! I never thought of it this way but of course He volunteered. This is so wonderful. Very well done.
I thought of Jesus as the first volunteer, but couldn't put it together in writing.You did it very nicely! I'm glad God used you to write it. I, too, enjoyed the descriptions of the people who were observed. I could see them along with God.
Very interesting depiction of our Father. Your writing flows extremly well and keeps a readers interest right to the end. I will be watching for more of your writings
Betty Overstreet