The Official Writing Challenge
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11/03/06
I really enjoyed this story! Great descriptions of both the contrasting personalities and appearances of the two boys from different lands, and the tension existing between the narrator's husband and the visiting exchange student--as well as their growing closeness.

The third to last paragraph seemed a little long and could be broken into two.

My favorite line in this is, "Their relationship was best reflected by their intermingling socks in the dryer." Delightfully original imagery!
11/04/06
best line....don't listen to people, listen to God
11/05/06
Your last paragraph is PERFECT - especially the last sentence. I love the little lessons interspersed throughout, and the engaging way you told this story. Great job!
What a great story of lessons learned from a student! You are a wonderful story-teller. The only thing I might do differently is to be more uniform with the lessons -possibly put them all at the beginning or the end of the paragraph each is described in. Keep Writing!
11/07/06
What a wonderful story! So glad to hear of people who listen to God's leading rather than worldly wisdom. Thanks for sharing this.
11/08/06
I wonder if this is true ... it reads that way. It is EXCELLENT! To host a student and ending up learning so much through such tough times ... a unique take on the topic, and it works well.

Great writing Marilee!