The Official Writing Challenge
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09/16/06
This poem has much to commend it--a fine example of free verse, with a rhythmic flow and lots of great word choices, and an ending to give one reason to stop and think.

It may be a bit cumbersome, and a few word choices perhaps questionable--like "gait" in the first line--but hey, you're the poet. That's what this kind of poetry is all about...on the whole, I enjoyed this.
09/17/06
You have some very nice images here, and left me much to think about. Thanks!
09/22/06
This reminds me a bit of the book of Job. The uninvited critique from the righteous-minded neighbor jumping the fence gives me pause. I'm not sure I "get" your message, because I don't know what the gardner is thinking, unless he figures he did his job, and the rest is up to the Almighty?

But, the writing is intriguing, and I especially liked these lines:

"So spake the neighbor in his righteous mind
To which the Mindless Gardener ne’er replied.
He only smiled and watched his garden grow
In God’s time, not his own conceited clock."