The Official Writing Challenge
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Sounds like a good story for Sunday School.
I think the story was super down to that last few paragraphs. I would have liked to have Maggie's thought as she felt the eyes upon her. Maybe even seen someone come over to help. Or her own thoughts on how it made her feel when no one did? Maggie had such a strong voice here i would have liked to have heard this voice all the way to the end. Great read!
03/04/05
What a well written and convicting story. Alas, too true many times, though! I liked how you really made the young mother come to life. Her frustration and weariness seemed very real. Thank you!