The Official Writing Challenge
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03/11/16
I think there were two stories in this one--The pink slips and Madelyn's nervous breakdown. I wasn't sure who the narrator of the story was.

If I were writing this piece, I would have made Madelyn the MC and shared it from her point-of-view.
03/11/16
Imaginative storyline, I enjoyed this piece.

God bless~
03/12/16
Red ink: you often used commas when you should have used a semi-colon. It was a good idea for the topic.