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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Rage (violent, uncontrolled hatred and anger) (02/05/15)
Harsh words cause a bad aftermath.
A soft answer turns away wrath.
To hold your temper it is good.
Think before you speak, if you would.

Quite often people get upset,
And do some things they will regret.
Anger out of hand becomes rage,
May be the reason for rampage.

Riots about police abuse
Some think they have a good excuse.
Road rage we hear a lot about.
Those who are involved scream and shout.

No good can come of such a mess.
Such confrontations cause distress.
Husbands and wives get angry too.
Physical violence may ensue.

Sometimes parents their temper lose,
And their children will abuse.
Words spoken in anger hurt too.
Wounds are not so easy to view.

So when anger turns into rage,
Seek for ways help to engage.
To manage anger there are ways.
Seems a common problem these days.

The Lord will help us if we ask.
He is the answer to this task.
When our lives to Him we commit,
The perfect solution we’ll get.
He’ll tell us what we need to do.
Obedience will see us through.
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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
02/18/15
I really enjoyed this poem. You did a nice job with giving very different examples that we can all relate to. You grabbed my attention right away.

I did notice you changed from starting out with the second person voice then switched to third. Curious enough, there is a lesson on the message boards about 2nd person (you) called Jan's Writing Basics. I urge all levels of writers to read and participate in it. Jan is wonderful about leaving feedback for anyone who posts in the thread. It's one of the best learning tools the internet has to offer. If you haven't checked it out yet, here's the link: http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewforum.php?f=67Your first stanza is a great example of it.

I really enjoyed your rhythm and meter. It flowed seamlessly. You also really nailed the topic in a fresh and interesting way. I enjoyed it from beginning to end.