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Topic: Cat and Dog (09/04/14)
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TITLE: More Than What Meets The Eye | Previous Challenge Entry
By Lindsey Ruby
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A few weeks later at work, a friend tossed the newspaper in front of me. My heart felt like it skipped a beat. On the cover was my neighbor, caught for armed robbery and rape.
Many things went through my head, but that evening when I got home, I sat staring at my cat and dog and knew there was more to this world then met the eye, that even some animals had more sense than I had. I thanked God for my pets. I now respect their judgment on (most) things. And I've learned, that there is more than what meets the eye out there.
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Well done. Animals have great instincts, just like children.
God bless~
A very good take on the topic.
It would be good to make it absolutely clear who wanted to tear who apart. Perhaps you could put a period after the word door, and start a new sentence as 'Remnar wanted to tear him apart.'
Interesting story. Nicely told.
It seems to me that the final sentence might read more smoothly without the comma after "learned". But that might be just me. :)
I especially liked the part that went "Sally, my cat, would know something was wrong and would wrap herself around me and try to comfort me, in her silky feline way. I thought my pets were mad and needy." Great visual and description!
Nice way of showing how animals do have very powerful and often spot-on instincts (or is it more than instinct?). I've got a horse who's that way. Wouldn't trade her for anything.
Nice!
I agree it would read much better with some changes. (I'm getting buggy not being able to fix things. Ha!)
This is what I learned, don't wait until Thursday morning to get something done.
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