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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Holiday (04/05/12)
As usual the sun made its slow creep above the horizon,
But unusual morning music structured the silence with intermittent percussive pots clashing, windy teapot resonating, mommy caringly calling, floors pleasantly squeaking.
Then slacks and shoes replaced my jeans and jordons,
And I did not travel alone to swipe my school-given metrocard
to board the A train while trying to avoid the Bully boys
or walk down school corridors of cruelty and cliques
wishing I were dead, hoping to avoid the taunts of teen terror.
(I could not live down the extra weight I carried. No diet programs worked for me.)
I could only wish I were dead.
But today?
After pancakes, we traveled together in the family van.
And we sat in a pew instead of me
in a too-small desk.
7 last words, 7 preachers.
Also surrounded by cruelty and cliques, He had uttered word 3 “Woman, behold thy son.”
And I thought I had it rough.
I wished out of fear and shame … but He actually bled and died
out of love, for me (and them too,) and
Three days later . . . ,
But today,
This holiday, we landmarked the time with different tunes, different steps, different depths
Though the celestial dance remained the same,
Our earthly movements changed
Because today is a hol-y-day, for “without the shedding of blood. . . “
Together we remembered “He could have called 10,000 angels. . .”
but He didn’t.
This day, a bad day for Jesus.
But a good Good Friday for me,
all 200 pounds.

Hallelujah.
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Genia Gilbert
04/14/12
I hear sadness here, but also victory. That is what Easter is about, right? This piece was a little hard for me to follow,but there's definitely a message.
C D Swanson 
04/14/12
This story makes the reader pause, reflect and think. I found it to be very clever. The MC's character was telling the story in a way that made the reader raise an eyebrow. But, in a good way. Whenever a reader needs to think, it is a good sign! LOL.

Anyhow - the message is clearly apparent...Jesus Christ's sacrifice for the sins of the world...For us.

I thought this was extremely clever. Thanks.

God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
04/14/12
I enjoyed this. Sometimes I stumble a bit of poetry, feeling I might have missed something important. But this was nice (I may have missed things that others would pick up) but it still touched my heart. The last line made me smile. It says a lot about accepting oneself just as I am. It made me smile too. Nicely done.
C D Swanson 
04/19/12
Congratulations & God Bless~
Margo McKenzie 
04/19/12
I am humbled and inspired by designation of Beginner First Place Winner. Thank you for the encouragement.
Kristine Baker
04/19/12
Congratulations!!!