The Official Writing Challenge
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Lovely poem! I like the structure; it feels like a song, which makes the 'dance' theme come alive.

When you have verse that's carefully structured like this, it will be at its strongest when the meter is matched in all the stanzas. Your refrain is beautiful; how about matching the first two lines in each stanza by deciding how many "beats" in the meter and sticking to it? (It's funny how a little discipline with that will make you dig for fresh ways of saying the thought, too!)

Your last stanza shines: "My life’s now a dance with Life Himself." Great stuff!