The Official Writing Challenge
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06/22/06
I love it. It's a great reminder of what the enemy wants us to think. The end left me wanting more! Perhaps you could expand this a little. I think it could make a great article in a teen magazine.
Beautiful piece! You made me quiver with her horrible burden of rejection and shame. I love the way it ends-- not only with her finding the One worth living for, but with a fighting drive to never let the enemy lock her again in that personal hell. Inspiring writing! Keep on!
06/26/06
I love how you wrote the dialogue as if it was actually more than one person. It seemed so real (at least to me - maybe I'm the only one who argues with myself, though). And then when it was apparent that it was the deceiver's voice...that was so poignant. He's so talented at deceiving, that we often think his voice is our own! Great job!
06/29/06
it is real