The Official Writing Challenge
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Interesting, but I'm not sure an ipod would allow God the silence to speak to you. But nicely done overall.
This can be expanded into a legit work. Avoid the tense shift and describe the walk, describe exactly what is happening during the walk. I think you have a start, keep writing.
Oh--if I only had the dedication to put this into practice. We all need to spend time alone with God, listening. You're right--it doesn't happen when a million other things are vying for our attention. A good devotional.

Perhaps in the last sentence you could start a new paragraph. That would help separate the tense change so that the reader would better understand that you are now speaking in the present.

A good job.