The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow, what an experience. I especially liked: "it gives me hope to know that if He was there when I was a sinner, how much more will He be with me now that I am His child."
You painted a perfect picture of hope in Him. Thanks for sharing this personal story. Good job!
definitely an experience that would draw you to God..Good job.
Great testimony, powerfully told becasue of your direct conversational style. You shift tenses a few times (start off in the past tense, then later it becomes present tense, etc), and I'd be inclined to lose the first paragraph. Nice writing.
You can certainly tell a story. How to make this even better? Treat what you have written as an outline and rewrite it showing the reader what happened, rather than telling. ('Ride?' Mark leaned across and opened the door. Like an innocent babe I jumped into the pickup...)