The Official Writing Challenge
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This has the beginning of a good article, but it didn't seem to flow real well. It was jumpy and hard to follow. With refinement and a rewrite, I think you could turn this into an encouraging article.
Good story. Held my attention. No doubt God can use us in every situation and circumstance if we just remain open to following God's will for us. Keep writing.
One of the things you might change to improve the flow of this piece is to keep everything in the same tense: either past or present, but not both in the same story. A heart-warming story; I hope some day we find out how it ends!