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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Lock (03/06/06)
As Kate sat on the second row of her home church, she could not fathom this would be her last Sunday here. This was the church she grew up in, got baptized in, and had her first real boyfriend in. She loved this church and she loved the people within it.
But it was time for Kate and her husband Paul, to move on. She knew this day would come. Paul was a preacher you see. They had both fervently prayed for years that he would one day pastor a church. Now the time had come. It was time for them to lock up their church, and their house and move forward.
A church had called them and it wasn’t too far away. They had fallen in love with the church the very first time they attended. And it had started to feel like home. But Kate still loved her old church. But she knew it was time. God was calling them into service somewhere else.
As the service ended, they were called to the front. Now was the time to express all they felt. “ Were there even words eloquent and expressive enough to really say what was in their hearts?” she thought.
As Kate stood there and looked over the numerous people, she was overwhelmed. Each person in that church meant something different to her. They were the keys that unlocked her life. Kate was overcome with emotion. “Was this it?” she thought.
As they made their way to the foyer of the church for the benediction, she took in one, long slow breath.
The service concluded and as people made their way out, there were many tears, hugs, well wishers, and stories of the past.
Finally, everyone was out. Kate turned and took one long, lasting look at her church now in her past. As she heard the door lock, she also heard the door to her future open.
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Jan Ackerson
03/13/06
Nice job of giving us a character to care about, and sticking with her POV. I wonder if you'd consider expanding this--showing your readers more of Kate and Paul's relationship, their call, and their good-bye to the old church. Loved your last sentence.
Valora Otis
03/14/06
Well done. I too would like to see this expanded to include more information. I love how you tied it all together in the end. Very nice!
Karen Rice
03/15/06
'...they were the keys that unlocked her life...' I REALLY would like to see this expanded on.

This felt more like an overveiw (a good one) but wonder if it would be looking into, a few key characters interacting. This left me wondering what each individual did by providing themselves as a 'key' in the relationship of this Pastorial couple.

Good work!
Jessica Schmit
03/17/06
Awww. I felt for her! Me and my husband will be doing the same in the next few months. A very beautiful story!