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Powerful piece. I might have wished for some resolution at the end, a hint that she knew that what she prayed had happened. Great work.
I will have to use the word 'powerful' also...this is exactly how the precious Holy Spirit will draw us and comfort us at the same time. Reminds me of the Psalm and how God reaches into the pit. (Psalm 40:2) The poetic, musical chorus was so anointed.
Forgiver...Redeemer...Deliverer....your parallel structure in this entire piece is skillfully done. Top notch writing!

I guessed this was yours!

As always, beautiful writing. I see a definate improvement in your stories over the past few weeks. You have an enormous amount of talent and I pray you'll keep plugging after God so He can use it to glorify Him. I really don't know what else to say. I thought it was fabulous!

WOW GIRL! I'm so proud of you! Smile big! You deserve this win.
Congrats Purity! I'm not the least bit surprized. Good stuff.
Excellent... you caused us to stand in the depths of human degradation and pointed to the only way out.
Crying out to God with the words "Enter me", was very soothing to my spirit. Awesome! Kate~
I loved this piece too. It was well done. It brought home the despair of these three souls. I love their prayers as well, so heart wrenching.

I think only one thing could have made this poem even more powerful - I, II, and III. I found the character switching in the third paragraph threw me off. I had to skip ahead to make sure it was actually done on purpose.

On the upside, the rest of your structure supported your writing perfectly.

Tahnk you.