The Official Writing Challenge
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Nicely written commentary. It is much easier for us to read though if you space between paragraphs, and separate dialogues. Just thought I'd let ya know. Enjoyed your thoughts! God bless ya, littlelight
You write with an easy-going, authentic voice. Avoid overuse of quotation marks, and work on paragraphing. I like the image of "we strain at the pressure of trying to control it all."
A little more "reader friendly" would help; by that, I mean separating the paragraphs for easy reading. The piece itself is very 'down to earth', and THAT makes it VERY readable. Thanks.