The Official Writing Challenge
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Well done. The concept of the umbrella is very interesting. Thank you for sharing your story.
Thank you for sharing your story. I'm so glad it had a happy ending and that you stayed the course so God could fulfill that promise for you.

The concept of the umbrella is very good, but I would have liked a little more explanation about why that would keep you with your husband when the family was suffocating. I thought maybe you were going to talk about God's umbrella of protection.

Overall, you did a great job in the telling of this story.
There's certainly no doubt about your writing ability; this is great! The only thing I questioned was the quickness with which the daughter changed her attitude. But then, you only had 750 words... Really, very well done.
You had me in tears with this piece - I grew up in a home with two alcoholics and I wished I had had someone like you explaining things to me. But that is water under the bridge and I am fortunate to be married to a man who very definitely keeps an 'open umbrella' (and invites strays and waifs - canine, feline and human under it quite often!)
Praise God for your husband's healing. The umbrella is a good analogy. Thank you for sharing this tender moment of your life.
This was an well-written, heartfelt account. Nice job! The word count limit can be quite constricting; you should consider writing a more complete telling apart from the challenge!
Beautifully written piece! It is a gripping account of a real life challenge. I rejoice with you in God's healing of your family. I look forward to reading more of your work!
You've given this testimony beautifully ... it was all the more precious when at the end, you revealed that it was your story. And your footnote is very wise.

Well done.
Beautiful, courageous testimony. Very well written.