The Official Writing Challenge
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10/26/18
I think you've got a great message here about the sort of trip a person might expect a marriage to be. You did a good job showing Hunter's hesitation to speak and the advice the counselor gave him and Amelia. It would have been nice to get Amelia's perspective, however, especially since it seemed as if Hunter was a little bit afraid of her. Often one partner is more vocal while the other finds it more difficult to speak. But if Amelia is as reserved as Hunter is, then it makes more sense. Overall I think you did a great job with the writing, and you made an excellent point at the end.

Communication gets things moving...one way or another. That's why Hunter felt better. At least his feelings and thoughts weren't jailed anymore. Right? That was the impression I got. Good writing.