The Official Writing Challenge
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08/09/18
So sorry to hear how stressed you are feeling. It certainly came through in this piece. I pray God watches over your daughter and gives her wisdom so she will make wise choices in life and stay out of harm's way. The only suggestion I would make on this piece is to notice how many times the words 'I just' were used in the last paragraph. Perhaps you could use different phrasing to make each point so as not to sound too repetitive with the same words.