The Official Writing Challenge
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06/14/18
Good job creating an entertaining story and character with a good lesson at the end.

Note: watch for continuity with your verb tenses when you are editing
06/15/18
God will surely bring us into balance, no matter what we decide to tackle. Hanging pictures up is sometimes frustrating; I could see myself in your story. I would try and break up some of your long sentences with two short ones--easier flow. Great job!
06/15/18
Good example of how we need to follow the instructions to be balanced in life.
06/21/18
Okay that's it
the discipline you spoke directly to me thank you spirit led
wonderful
07/19/18
Instructions - so dreaded, yet so necessary. I'm one of those weird people who read the instructions before I turn a new device on. Sad thing is that many instructions are unclear. The Bible isn't - its as clear as day! Thank you for reminding us about God's instructions. I picked up on some punctuation that needed correcting and some long sentences.