The Official Writing Challenge
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Good job creating an entertaining story and character with a good lesson at the end.

Note: watch for continuity with your verb tenses when you are editing
God will surely bring us into balance, no matter what we decide to tackle. Hanging pictures up is sometimes frustrating; I could see myself in your story. I would try and break up some of your long sentences with two short ones--easier flow. Great job!
Good example of how we need to follow the instructions to be balanced in life.
Okay that's it
the discipline you spoke directly to me thank you spirit led
Instructions - so dreaded, yet so necessary. I'm one of those weird people who read the instructions before I turn a new device on. Sad thing is that many instructions are unclear. The Bible isn't - its as clear as day! Thank you for reminding us about God's instructions. I picked up on some punctuation that needed correcting and some long sentences.