The Official Writing Challenge
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10/12/17
Good job in taking a physical storm and incorporating in spiritual elements. I think this piece could have been more powerful with an illustration of someone who lived out the principles you described.
Good illustration of tying storms with spiritual aspects of the floods we have had recently.

I may have added a family being affected from the storm.
Your thoughts in the last paragraph - the conclusion - was very good. I felt, as I was reading your article, that the body was somehow to long. Say the same thing but just shorter.

Your overall thoughts were excellent.

Keep writing.
10/15/17
Excellent thoughts on the challenge of "Storms". Hopefully those that had encountered those recent catastrophic storms will read this and be blessed by your encouraging words.

I think shorter paragraphs would have made this easier to read. Small bites are easier to swallow.

God bless and look forward to your future work.