The Official Writing Challenge
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07/23/16
Great story! One small thing; I would not reveal the name of Twain too early. Let the reader discover along with Paul what her actual name is. Perhaps he could hear one of the other woman call out her name. Hope you do well in the Challenge!
07/24/16
I enjoyed your story. You did a great job contrasting real fellowship with virtual fellowship.
This is an interesting commentary on our society but aren't we all in it?

The only way to have a friend is to be a friend to someone.

You might use this as a teaching tool.
07/24/16
Great job on this story - getting your point across. :)
07/26/16
Very interesting story that we can all identify with to some degree. Well written. Thanks for sharing.
07/28/16
Congratulations, Karen, on your story placing 4th place in the Beginners category this week.

Being social on Facebook is very different than being social in the real world. I enjoyed that the hero wasn't blue eyed with drop dead gorgeous looks.


i think it should read: leaned back in his chair.